Week 7 Story: What the Jackal Did

What the Jackal Did, based on The Jackal and the Crocodiles (Santal Folklore from "Folklore of the Santal Parganas" translated by C. H. Bompas)

"What did you do to get yourself in here, Pop?"

The old Jackal scowled at his new cellmate, a young, robust Hare who was covered from head to toe in colorful tattoos. The Hare shrugged and hopped up into the top bunk.

"Alright, we don't have to talk."

The Jackal paced around the cell, debating to himself whether it was worth the trouble of explaining himself just for a little company. He had grown bitter in the time he'd spent in that small room with only porridge to eat and a little bit of sunlight coming in through the cracks in the ceiling. He cleared his throat.

"I'll tell you, but only if you'll shut up and listen."

The Hare rolled over and his long ears perked up.

Jackal by Carrie Cizauskas via Flickr
"It started when I was young. I didn't have much to live on. It was just me and my wits, so I used my wits to get what I needed. You wouldn't think it looking at me, but I love to eat and when I see food, there's not much you or anyone else can do to keep me away from it"

The Hare nodded in agreement. "I'm the same way," he said.

"I told you not to interrupt. Anyway, it's different for me. I'm an omnivore. So anyway, when I was young I lived near a pond, and one day I spied a little human kid with a sack full of books. Now, schoolbooks are worth money, and if you know how to use them right you can get even more. So I ran up and pushed him over and grabbed the bag and went."

"You got this much time just for stealing books?"

"No," snarled the Jackal. "I was getting to the next part. Now let me talk."

The Hare shrugged again and let the Jackal continue.

"So I thought, I could sell these books and take the money and buy myself some food. Or, I could invest. So I read them. I learned the material and I decided to become a tutor and find myself some bright, young pupils. I was walking along one day and I met an old Crocodile with five little babies - round, tender little kids, delicious-looking..." The Jackal trailed off, and the Hare began to feel uncomfortable. He gestured to the Jackal to continue.

"I couldn't help myself. I was teaching them their lessons, and I got hungry and I just had to! I grabbed the littlest one and ate him up. Of course, I felt pretty bad about eating my student, but I thought it would be best just to keep going with the lesson. I put the crocodiles to bed that night and swore that the next day I'd do better."

"Geez, you ate your student? No wonder you've got such a bad reputation around here." The Hare, being an herbivore, felt offended.

"Shut up! Do you want to hear my story or not?"

The Hare nodded, now too involved in the story, and too horrified, to cut it short.

"So the next day we had our lesson and lunchtime came around, and I tried to resist it! But I couldn't. So I popped the next littlest in my mouth. And it went on like that for the next few days until I realized that there was only one little crocodile left. And then the worst happened."

The Hare was feeling queasy, and did not even want to imagine what could be worse.

"The Crocodile father came to check on his babies. So of course, I told him they were underwater, but he said he wanted to see them, so I picked up the same one five times, you know, to make it look like all five were still there. But he didn't buy it. I knew he had seen through my trick, so I ran. The police caught up to me and I've been in here since."

"Don't you feel awful?" asked the Hare.

"I mostly just feel hungry," answered the Jackal with a vicious snarl, and he returned to his bunk.


Author's note: The original Santal tale is very similar to this, but told in real time rather than through dialogue. I decided to change the setting to animal prison and to let the Jackal reflect on his actions through a conversation with his new cellmate.

Comments


  1. Hey Natalie,

    I really liked your story and how you kept with the original but changed the way it was told. If I were the hare, I would also be horrified to hear the story, especially since the Jackal doesn't seem to be at all sorry for what he did. The Jackal might even eat his bunkmate next! Great job over all, it was an enjoyable read.
    -Elyse

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  2. Natalie,
    I really liked this story it made me laugh. I like that you told it through dialogue and that you had the jackal say student's books are worth money (definitely true). I think telling a story in dialogue is really hard so I'm impressed with the way you made it seem so natural.

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  3. Hey, Natalie!

    The decision to set this in a jail cell with some hardened convict animals made me laugh. Definitely not a setting that I'm used to and it was really entertaining! The idea of a stout little rabbit with gang tattoos was a great mental image. That must be a pretty tough jackal, if he's able to take on crocodiles. Even if they're just babies, I wouldn't pick a fight with crocs.

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  4. Hi Natalie!

    I love the setting for this story. It was a very creative choice to frame this in an animal prison! I'm surprised that the father crocodile didn't eat the jackal or something like that. He only called the police! I also thought it was funny that the jackal didn't resell the books because if he tried, he wouldn't have gotten very much money! Now, I wonder what the hare did to end up in the same cell as this jackal.. Great story!

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  5. Natalie,

    You wrote a cool take on a seemingly nifty story! I haven't read the original, so I don't have much to compare it to. I am constantly surprised by how even small stylistic changes can alter the feel of a whole story. Thanks for experimenting with that style and creating a arguably more readable story. Great job!

    -Lance J

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  6. Hello, Natalie!

    I really like your take on the story! I also like how you gave the reader just enough of a description of the Hare to understand what kind of person he is and what he looks like. I really thought you were going to take a twist at the end and say that the Jackal ate (or tried to eat) the Hare at the end. Great story!

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